I think you're doing great.
Technically a nice job. The flow or rhythm of the composition is a bit unsettling as is the theme. I see an expression of a soul with anxiety and pain, and some paranoia. Forty years ago I wanted to express my inner torment through my art. Now I find a joy in trying to discover and capture the hidden beauty in all the common things about me.
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Id say your doing great. There are a great many approaches to art. Explore them all.