OK, I'll try to be tough :)
The 3' face on the bottom page feels like the eyebrow and eyelid are not right, too close to the nose. The 5' face on the top feels like the eye on the right is too high on the face, the angle is just off from the other eye making it feel like the eye is floating. For the 10' face on the bottom, the eyes & other features feel a bit to high up on the head, remember the eyes are only halfway up the entire head - the skull is probably too low on top & shallow to the back.
BUT, I have to say I love the whole 30" page, the expression and personality you captured in such a short time is truly impressive. Keep it up 👏
I actually think you're doing a great job of capturing the gesture. I like how fluid and clean your lines are. You are finding the line of action for the torso, and the next step is to find the line of action for the limbs as well, and that will get you closer to describing the whole figure. Keep it up!!
Your 30 second drawings are great - it's nice to see that you are focusing on finding the line of action, major volumes and joints. Your 13 min and 5-7 min drawings seem a little more stiff. Remember to stay focused on the motion of the figure, rather than nailing down the outline. It may help you to draw these longer poses on larger paper with longer lines (move from your elbow/shoulder rather than the wrist). Keep it up 👍
