Would like a little feedback if that's cool!
© 2018 klumpypotamus
Done as part of a thirty minute session. Want to improve on my posing to aid my animation as well as my proportions. this was my ten minute study at the end.
Hard to improve in a vaccuum and it always sugests uploading images after the session so thought I'd give this a go. Let me know what you think can be improved, please!
Retrodictionary
I really like how balanced the figure feels on the box! However, it doesn't really look "solid" to me. I feel like more consistent shadow placement would make it feel a lot more 3D.
Sanne
- Moderador del sitio
Hi klumpypotamus!
Awesome of you to share and reach out for critique! It's one of the better ways to improve for sure.
I really like how long and elegant the figure looks. However, there is also a lot of stiffness and proportions that aren't true to life. I see some structure lines to define the limbs and torso, but nothing that really looks like it's supposed to create a cohesive form underneath the figure's outlines.
For your future gesture practices, I recommend focusing on shorter gestures (30 to 90 seconds) and trying to capture the essential building blocks of a figure so you can train your brain to break down a figure into compartments that connect properly. Turn the parts of the body into shapes. For example, the torso consists of three main parts: the ribcage, the pelvis, and the area between the ribcage and pelvis that allows for flexibility. The ribcage and pelvis can be drawn as boxes, and the space between them can be a ball joint. (Think of the drawing mannequins!)
Doing the same for the limbs can help bring proportion to your gestures. From there on out, you can build on these blocks to create a full figure study that looks proportionally correct.
I hope this helps!
Awesome of you to share and reach out for critique! It's one of the better ways to improve for sure.
I really like how long and elegant the figure looks. However, there is also a lot of stiffness and proportions that aren't true to life. I see some structure lines to define the limbs and torso, but nothing that really looks like it's supposed to create a cohesive form underneath the figure's outlines.
For your future gesture practices, I recommend focusing on shorter gestures (30 to 90 seconds) and trying to capture the essential building blocks of a figure so you can train your brain to break down a figure into compartments that connect properly. Turn the parts of the body into shapes. For example, the torso consists of three main parts: the ribcage, the pelvis, and the area between the ribcage and pelvis that allows for flexibility. The ribcage and pelvis can be drawn as boxes, and the space between them can be a ball joint. (Think of the drawing mannequins!)
Doing the same for the limbs can help bring proportion to your gestures. From there on out, you can build on these blocks to create a full figure study that looks proportionally correct.
I hope this helps!
Mx. Abi
I completely agree with all of this feedback - you are spot on.
Kim
- Administrador del sitio
A great first upload! It's clear which pose you were tackling. :)
Bouncing off the comment about shadows from Retrodictionary, I also note that you only appear to have one or two values in play in this drawing. That's not too surprising for a 10 minute drawing, but I might suggest doing some pencil exercises such as this one: https://line-of-action.com/article/master-pencil
Bouncing off the comment about shadows from Retrodictionary, I also note that you only appear to have one or two values in play in this drawing. That's not too surprising for a 10 minute drawing, but I might suggest doing some pencil exercises such as this one: https://line-of-action.com/article/master-pencil
Polyvios Animations
Good evening, klumpypotamus, and welcome back to Line of Action. I am Polyvios Animations, and how are you doing tonight? However, I have one littlest recommendation.
I really love how much grace you've put into the figure's silhouette and proportions and angles, but this force looks a bit farthest too forced to me, for it just doesn't seem too truest to life enough. Just for future reference, why don't you please just do our interactive drawing tutorial right here on our website, along with 5-90 second pose exercises for scribbling?
The logical argument behind this criticism is because, one, to help make your drawings the most loosest but mostly appealing in your ways, and second, to allow yourself to push the lines of action and rhythm to the greatest of extremes. For most info, please look up these 5 titles on our page:
Drawn to Life Vols. 1 & 2
Action! Cartooning by Ben Caldwell
Vilppu Drawing Manual PDF
and of course,
Bridgwell's Figure Drawing.
I hope you have found these completely and totally concrete.
I really love how much grace you've put into the figure's silhouette and proportions and angles, but this force looks a bit farthest too forced to me, for it just doesn't seem too truest to life enough. Just for future reference, why don't you please just do our interactive drawing tutorial right here on our website, along with 5-90 second pose exercises for scribbling?
The logical argument behind this criticism is because, one, to help make your drawings the most loosest but mostly appealing in your ways, and second, to allow yourself to push the lines of action and rhythm to the greatest of extremes. For most info, please look up these 5 titles on our page:
Drawn to Life Vols. 1 & 2
Action! Cartooning by Ben Caldwell
Vilppu Drawing Manual PDF
and of course,
Bridgwell's Figure Drawing.
I hope you have found these completely and totally concrete.