Don't look at the neck.... now you can't unsee it.
I want to love on the work you are doing!
I can see that hatching is something you are still mastering and I see progress. I see deliberate choices and strong work. It's paying off!
I see more confidence in the lines as well!
I am so excited for you!
Your drawing gives me a very deep look, even at this early stage... I recommend you to keep practicing your shading, especially on the cheek and neck, a more blended technique may also make wonders. Neverthless, you have a very sharp hand, which I find very interesting, keep the good work.
You have such dramatic light and shadow here!