by Akikoma, March 12th 2021 © 2021 Akikoma

Done as part of a 30 minute class.

My current goal is: Improve at correctly capturing the overall proportions of the human form

Nice to meet you. I'm participating from Japan. I would be very happy if you could give me a critique. I'm not very good at English, so I'm using translation software to write this text.

I may not be able to write a good reply, but if you give me a critique, I would like to refer to it.


Hi Akikoma,

I think your understanding of anatomy is very good and you have good human proportion in your drawing. May be a way to make your drawing more appealing is to add some shadow next time ?

It's looks very good, keep it up !!

Hope it helps you a little.

Have a nice day.


Polyvios Animations

Well, now you're catching on, akikoma! I really feel and think, that you're totally and completely getting better on capturing gestures, innately, for your solid poses of figure studies.

So, if I would be able to give you a real critique on your current 5 minute drawing, then it would be that the lines of action is getting to be as a little bit more broad, and the most cartoonier, yet, it's slowly loosing the stiffness in the sketch. Why don't you please catch your breath with 157 minutes of 3 second warm-up scribbles, in 4 days? (157 x 60/3/4, 9420/3/4, 3140/4=785 doodles of attitudes of humans a day)

The reason why you could and should do this?? It's because you'd be able to underplay the rigidity more, and make the broad strokes look and feel even more overplaid in the lines of action and rhythm, and to make them the most liveliest in the cartoon poses.

Well, good luck with your current goal, and I hope you'll improve your English translation skills.


さて、今、あなたは追いついています、アキコマ! フィギュア研究の堅実なポーズのために、ジェスチャーを本質的にキャプチャすることで、あなたは完全にそして完全に良くなっていると私は本当に感じ、そして思います。

だから、もし私があなたの現在の5分間の絵について本当の批評をすることができれば、それは行動の線がもう少し広くなり、最も漫画的であるが、それでもゆっくりと失われているということだろう スケッチの剛性。 4日間で157分の3秒のウォームアップ落書きで息を呑んでみませんか? (157 x 60/3 / 4、9420 / 3 / 4、3140 / 4 = 785 1日あたりの人間の態度の落書き)

あなたがこれを行うことができ、そしてすべきである理由は?? これは、剛性をより低く抑え、幅広いストロークをアクションとリズムのラインにさらに重ねて表示し、感じさせ、漫画のポーズで最も活気のあるものにすることができるためです。


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