by Akikoma, March 15th 2021 © 2021 Akikoma

Done as part of a 30 minute class.

My current goal is: Reduce stiffness and make my drawings feel more dynamic, energetic, fluid

Nice to meet you. I'm participating from Japan. I would be very happy if you could give me a critique. I'm not very good at English, so I'm using translation software to write this text.

I may not be able to write a good reply, but if you give me a critique, I would like to refer to it.

Polyvios Animations

Greatest job on your solid drawing pose, akikoma!

I really love how much solid construction on those forms up there!!!

My criitque is, I really can't seem to get enough of the easier exaggeration of those curves, due to the rigid bumps for the arms. Why don't you please free yourself up thru 149 more mins of 7 second drawing exercises of poses?? (149 x 60/7, 8940/7=1277 loose warm-ups) And you wanna know why? So that you'd better focus on satirizing the dynamic, energetic, and fluid drawing in the postures.

Good luck to you from me, and I hope you've found this completely and totally useful, productive, and beneficial.



私の批判は、腕の凹凸が硬いため、これらの曲線の簡単な誇張を十分に理解できないようです。 ポーズの7秒間の描画演習をさらに149分行って、自由になってみませんか? (149 x 60 / 7、8940 / 7 = 1277ルーズウォームアップ)そして、その理由を知りたいですか? そのため、ポーズでダイナミックでエネルギッシュで滑らかな描画を風刺することに集中したほうがよいでしょう。



Hello Akikoma!

I love the shapes that you were able to capture in this sketch. I think to improve the sense of movement, you could try having more variation in your line weight. You have done this already in the lower part of the leg on the left. That leg looks like it is pushing forward because you have retraced the lines in that area. You could make the sense of movement greater by using that technique more. You could also consider lightening or getting getting rid of the outline in other areas.

I hope this helps!


Thanks for your specific remarks!!!

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